tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6522720778738309123.post3417461836888378423..comments2023-06-17T04:35:45.326-04:00Comments on Strange and Potent Mixture: DisquietedAmi Mattisonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12391930163467566669noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6522720778738309123.post-76345443441032856382011-03-31T17:39:09.500-04:002011-03-31T17:39:09.500-04:00Dreamy and sensual. Thanks for listening to the di...Dreamy and sensual. Thanks for listening to the divine demand in your scarlet ear.Tess Kincaidhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04889725786678984293noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6522720778738309123.post-30499431644072659602011-03-31T08:01:56.967-04:002011-03-31T08:01:56.967-04:00Hedgewitch and I have had a couple conversations a...Hedgewitch and I have had a couple conversations about our poetry as a stumbling, Job-like faith in the Voice inside our ear -- from very different perspectives, the verbal rules we follow stem from that Voice. Sometimes I think of the Voice as the sound of the sea, remembered all the way down to my earliest childhood when I heard my mother sing by the sea other times it's down my brainstem to the first animal to leave the sea. Sometimes it's a deep father, down a line of fathers into the mythological zone. I read these women in that way, the chorus of Voices present and past who nurture and further and naysay your own -- especially in "...whisper / her divine demand in my scarlet ear.' And the lonliness of this is that "no one follows" -- we all proceed into our poems and their Orphic scatter alone. Very fine work. - BrendanBrendanhttp://blueoran.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6522720778738309123.post-35482678013615432322011-03-31T07:15:46.427-04:002011-03-31T07:15:46.427-04:00This is beautifully written. It appears (to me) t...This is beautifully written. It appears (to me) that you try to please all the women in your life but fail to succeed...?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6522720778738309123.post-84841422596978741162011-03-30T23:24:41.343-04:002011-03-30T23:24:41.343-04:00no one will take me with them and no one will come...no one will take me with them and no one will come with me...just use me for pleasure, company a dance or two then pass me on to the next...nope dont know anything about, cant relate at all...snickers...a wonderful write ami...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6522720778738309123.post-85311127906418400142011-03-30T20:22:20.276-04:002011-03-30T20:22:20.276-04:00a haunting piece, Ami. the last stanza won't ...a haunting piece, Ami. the last stanza won't leave me for a whileStacy Michellehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08970962940606188948noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6522720778738309123.post-65141078022214894512011-03-29T20:27:59.265-04:002011-03-29T20:27:59.265-04:00GRR @ Blogger!!!! I just left a gape-jawed comment...GRR @ Blogger!!!! I just left a gape-jawed comment at how fricking close to the bone and brilliant this is, and got the "service not available" error thingie. Gah!Fireblossomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6522720778738309123.post-16635844240813531352011-03-28T12:29:09.482-04:002011-03-28T12:29:09.482-04:00Thanks, Maureen and Hedgewitch, for your encouragi...Thanks, Maureen and Hedgewitch, for your encouraging remarks!<br /><br />Maureen, I like your suggestions. That last stanza has seen several different line breaks so far. I'll try "I flee" on a line by itself. Thanks!Ami Mattisonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12391930163467566669noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6522720778738309123.post-82534695505908067062011-03-28T10:35:49.611-04:002011-03-28T10:35:49.611-04:00Very dreamlike, very controlled--I see images and ...Very dreamlike, very controlled--I see images and reflections of the self as well as lovers' faces--and how many of those don't we run away from? A lovely, deft array of visuals and sensual language as well, all leading the reader to think about the lines between people and self, between dreams and reality.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6522720778738309123.post-65728746627179172932011-03-28T10:25:17.292-04:002011-03-28T10:25:17.292-04:00This is a fascinating poem, Ami. I can read it sev...This is a fascinating poem, Ami. I can read it several ways but ultimately as the "I" who narrates the poem as being all the women who tread upon sleep.<br /><br />"... whisper / her divine demand in my scarlet ear" is lovely.<br /><br />That 7th stanza would be even more striking without the first two words. Similarly, a bit of cropping of the last stanza might leave it stronger (e.g.: "Then I run. I mean / I flee / as I am meant for leaving."Maureenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13290283101378474845noreply@blogger.com