tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6522720778738309123.post3851851524347859301..comments2023-06-17T04:35:45.326-04:00Comments on Strange and Potent Mixture: hard scratchAmi Mattisonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12391930163467566669noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6522720778738309123.post-59427044077882277232011-02-10T03:45:55.454-05:002011-02-10T03:45:55.454-05:00Great tone, flow, line breaks, etc. Focused, impr...Great tone, flow, line breaks, etc. Focused, impressive work.Steve Isaakhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07162341357622058518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6522720778738309123.post-4625522498579593912011-02-04T01:31:32.727-05:002011-02-04T01:31:32.727-05:00Strong images, pulling, the yearning burns... lead...Strong images, pulling, the yearning burns... leading on, searching the expanse, trying to quelch the unending burn.<br /><br />Wonderfully written.Reflectionshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09655163868990155242noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6522720778738309123.post-19152061930631173102011-02-03T10:56:04.100-05:002011-02-03T10:56:04.100-05:00A lot of good images here. The first section could...A lot of good images here. The first section could maybe be pared down slightly because it's a bit slow, but the movement of the poem as a whole is good. Well done.Valeriehttp://candleinsunshine.com/asthemoonclimbs/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6522720778738309123.post-82504500130826732662011-02-03T09:20:08.523-05:002011-02-03T09:20:08.523-05:00Fabulous poem, Ami. There's an urgency in the ...Fabulous poem, Ami. There's an urgency in the cadence; the poem's tight and well-controlled; the narrative beautifully executed.Maureenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13290283101378474845noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6522720778738309123.post-40477513192431745012011-02-02T23:47:09.628-05:002011-02-02T23:47:09.628-05:00enjoyed the suspense relating to the indecisivenes...enjoyed the suspense relating to the indecisiveness within her heartshewritinghttp://shewriting.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6522720778738309123.post-68537188906875773502011-02-02T23:33:07.709-05:002011-02-02T23:33:07.709-05:00Beautiful imagery.Beautiful imagery.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6522720778738309123.post-2130901567121820102011-02-02T20:24:17.771-05:002011-02-02T20:24:17.771-05:00Wonderful working from piece to piece and the fina...Wonderful working from piece to piece and the final ..final good-bye to dirt and chiggers and everything...that we take with us even as we leave it all behind.....it reminds me when I left the farm many years ago...though I did not run away- the liberation was the same...as I never did return....nice work Ami....bkmsigned...bkmhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03558304976280070986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6522720778738309123.post-49083737526776470082011-02-02T15:03:40.665-05:002011-02-02T15:03:40.665-05:00This poem of self-liberation is utterly fabulous, ...This poem of self-liberation is utterly fabulous, Ami. Stunning-- tre stunning: these lines so carve into me on this cold Colorado morning:<br /><br />"..begins so small but burns as you claw-cut<br />it open you prefer the seeping<br /><br />wound to the craving that settles<br />deep and seeps from your veins<br /><br />infiltrates your brain and burns<br />your skin your darkness"-<br /><br />do you know Tess Gallagher's poem about getting her hair shaved off-- the intensity and compression of the imagery reminds me of her exactitude...xxxxjJenne' R. Andrews https://www.blogger.com/profile/15744946229300234443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6522720778738309123.post-31978970834487644102011-02-02T14:53:41.460-05:002011-02-02T14:53:41.460-05:00Long but unstoppable, where every word counts in a...Long but unstoppable, where every word counts in a steadily building tension til I was wanting to run out the screendoor scratching (into a snowdrift.) You've got the feel of the land and the people in this, and some unforgettable lines->"...from mud there’s nothing to lose nothing/ to prove nowhere to go but up from dirt..."hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6522720778738309123.post-20567305255037765142011-02-02T14:03:29.154-05:002011-02-02T14:03:29.154-05:00I agree with Dustus, I have listened to your Anti-...I agree with Dustus, I have listened to your Anti-love reading and I would love to hear you read this one. Your poems are a such a treat!<br /><br />Cheers<br />PadmavaniPadmavani Karkerahttp://www.padmavani.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6522720778738309123.post-56713846208479429742011-02-02T08:42:39.149-05:002011-02-02T08:42:39.149-05:00Hard hitting and stirring. An onslaught of imagery...Hard hitting and stirring. An onslaught of imagery in a very well told, moving narrative poem. I know I've said it before, would love to hear you read one to discover how the language bends with your chosen cadence. :)Cheersdustushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07796500077556153584noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6522720778738309123.post-51171533770858846092011-02-02T08:40:21.102-05:002011-02-02T08:40:21.102-05:00Well there's nothing to lose and nothing to pr...Well there's nothing to lose and nothing to prove and I'm dancing with myself oh oh oh oh<br /><br />Oops, let me turn down the Donnas.<br /><br />I've felt this itch. All my life til I bolted. I love the way this poem builds. Go, roadrunner!Fireblossomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6522720778738309123.post-1907675880715551642011-02-02T08:05:57.399-05:002011-02-02T08:05:57.399-05:00smiles....you have a wonderful style of story tell...smiles....you have a wonderful style of story telling...so real and descriptive...dont look back...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.com