Sunday, February 13, 2011

Cowgirls




What remains is mortared stone and the wood-framed window where I sat sighing at the colored prairie, longing for some glimpse of Elizabeth—her hat’s weathered brim telling hard times she rarely spoke of. The old Chestnut finally arrived. Only now do I dare wander that purple expanse, seeking some evidence of my poor love.


© Ami Mattison


Flash Fiction 55 for One Stop Poetry's Picture Prompt Challenge.

Photo courtesy of Sean McCormick


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11 comments:

  1. dustusFebruary 13, 2011 at 4:24 PM

    I enjoy when artists can express so much story and feeling succinctly. The portrait of Elizabeth and the details that shine through the speaker's feelings paint a telling composite of why the cowgirl wanders. Great final line too. You write a mean 55, Ami.

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  2. FireblossomFebruary 13, 2011 at 4:29 PM

    *hands on hips*

    WHO wanted happy endings? WHO was that?

    LOL

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  3. Ami MattisonFebruary 13, 2011 at 5:09 PM

    Aw,thanks, Adam! You flatter me. I'm just now warming up to this flash 55 thing. It's a great writing exercise and fun to boot!

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  4. Ami MattisonFebruary 13, 2011 at 5:12 PM

    Fireblossom! Big grin. Yeah, yeah, but you like angsty girls/ghosts in love, doncha? So, consider this one for you...

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  5. FireblossomFebruary 13, 2011 at 6:15 PM

    Oh, I never said I didn't like it! I do, it paints a vivid picture. And besides, cowgirls? I'm not gonna like COWGIRLS? Pfffft! ;-)

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  6. Ami MattisonFebruary 13, 2011 at 6:31 PM

    LOL. I'll have to remember: cowgirls=FB magnet. But I SWEAR I'm going to write a happy ending...someday soon.

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  7. signed...bkmFebruary 13, 2011 at 6:55 PM

    Nice beginning of story...now please tell...where is Elizabeth....bkm

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  8. Ami MattisonFebruary 13, 2011 at 7:05 PM

    Ha, bkm! Waddaya expect in 55 measly words? But I'm thinking now that I might expand this into a short story...and add a happy ending! Instead of poor Elizabeth lost to the prairie and her lover wandering around after her. Thanks for stopping by!

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  9. Shah WhartonFebruary 14, 2011 at 8:59 AM

    Err - remind me never to ask you to look at my rubbish! ;) Beautiful and humbling. Shah .X

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  10. ClaudiaFebruary 14, 2011 at 1:38 PM

    i think the unhappy ending is just perfect for this melancholic short story..staring through the rotten frame, i wonder if i can get some glimpse of Elizabeth..
    did you get my mail by the way..?

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  11. Ami MattisonFebruary 14, 2011 at 4:30 PM

    Thanks, Shah! And thanks, Claudia!

    Claudia, I didn't get your mail. Feel free to send again.

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