Poems and writings by Ami Mattison
wow...that feels rather painful...emotive write ami...being offline you may not know what happened to hedge when she dabbled with near haiku...i will pray for you.smiles.
Yeah, Brian. Max impact in six lines. Texture of reality, texture of emotion interweaved. Well done.
Well, there's certainly nothing cheery about a plague. You've definitely packed a punch in those few lines.
No question about the vivid imagery you create with this.The Shadorma is a form I like a lot.
Excellent poem, Ami--a very vivid living image of the disease of grief. (And hope you avoid the curse of the haiku--er, short form poetry demon)